If time were open like a door,
And if the shattered wall became the floor,
Then when the trees laid-low the ground,
Your ears would die, as would the sound.
There in front of you is a golden door;
Stay away, or you'll ask for more.
Keep your feet up off the ground
Or stay away and never be found.
The only way to keep you secure
Is to find a way; to find a cure
For laughter in a solemn place:
You're locked outside of time and space.
I would take you back if I knew you'd live;
You'll never know how much I'd give
to see you cry, to see you weep.
For as I think of you and cannot sleep,
The things I had, I wish I'd known
Were all you had you could have shown.
The sadness that you had inside
Was nothing that we couldn't hide.
Ben, my boy, I absolutely must admit I can make nothing of this one. :P Perhaps I would venture to hesitantly say that the speaker is talking to someone who has passed into eternity...or is about to pass...or....I DON'T KNOW! :P LOL Now, I would LOVE your interpretation of this one, chap! It should be something deep! ;)
ReplyDeleteGreat rhyming scheme, and I love you chaps new blog!
--Dalu--
Btw, I'm following your blogs, but anonymously. :P
ReplyDelete--Dalu--
Same here, Dalu. I can't figure it out either. Do you think you could shed some light on this one for us, Coyle? Or do you not know what it is about either?
ReplyDeleteJames,
ReplyDelete*dips a curtsey* Hallo, sir, I don't think we've been introduced. :P But any chap of Ben's is one o' mine! Nice to meet you! ;) I'm really enjoying this blog, I must say. :D
--Dalu--
Dalu,
ReplyDelete*Bows* ;)
I guess we haven't been formally introduced but you have seen my comments before, as I comment on Coyle's blog sometimes. However, I recently starting using the pen name of James D. Hench and so you may not recognize me from before. I used to comment as Walker L., but I decided I'd like to be a little more anonymous.
Glad you're enjoying the blog!
Best Regards,
J.D.H.
James,
DeleteAh! I see now! So YOU were Walker--er are--whatever ye say. :P James D. Hench...hmmm...sounds like a writer's name. :P How'd ye come up with it, might I ask? I know where Ben got his. LOL
--Dalu--
Yes, lol.
DeleteUmm...I actually can't take full credit for the name. When I was about six I asked my dad to help me come up with a name for the detective in a story I was writing and he suggested "Hench." For some reason I've used the name on websites and forums and such ever since, adding the first name of "James" and the middle initial.
Dalu,
ReplyDeleteLOL, thanks! I love our new blog too. :P LOL! XD
LOL, to "hesitantly say"! Nice. XD
James,
Good guess, LOL! Most of the time I don't know what my poems are about at first; at least, I know the general idea of where I'm going, but I haven't cognitively put it into words yet when I first start writing, so I have to interpret it after the fact as if I am interpreting someone else's poem almost. LOL
Probably the issue with this poem is that most of it doesn't mean what it seems to mean, and, I didn't give any explanation for all of the (seemingly) nonsense. :)
Now for the first paragraph, with all the confusion going on. It is saying that if everything happened like that, the person who the speaker is speaking to (the 'second character') wouldn't be strong enough to handle it;
then in the next paragraph, it shows that the second character is easily swayed by things. If they find a golden door, they'll want more than that, and probably want to know what's behind its opening. They are so weak, that the only way they can endure the world is to keep their feet off the ground; to keep their mind away from the worldly things and float heavenwards--or, they can hide from everything so that they aren't found by things that can harm them.
In the next few lines, its not so much that they've passed into eternity (LOL) or are actually outside of time and space, but that what they do and the way the see the world has removed them, in a way, from everything they need to see; they laugh when things are solemn, and do things at the wrong times.
As the last two paragraphs are technically connected, I will describe them as if they were together:
The speaker is saying that he would try to change the second character--bring her (it is a her) back to the painful reality--if he knew that she was strong enough to survive the transformation without totally breaking down mentally (and possibly physically).
And finally, the two of them have separated she was so sad inside that it bothered him just to be in her presence. Now he would give anything to see her crying, even; he understands that that sadness would be more happy than being apart, for they could cover it over, even if they couldn't wholly heal it. And, she was so lost, all that she could give didn't seem enough to him then.
LOL, so I guess maybe I should have spent a little more time making sense than making rhymes, and then I wouldn't have to interpret. :D Hopefully that sheds a little light on things, anyway.
Thanks for commenting and reading!
-- Coyle
Wow! That's some serious detail, chap! Thanks for enlightening us on this! Still, for some weird reason, I'm confused, but that's probably because I don't know the real situation. :P Ye'd better save this explanation, because one day poetry people all over are going to be discussing your work in biographies of the great Coyle H. McTroon! :P LOL Really, though, this IS a good poem. :P
DeleteP.S.
It was so hilarious that I thought I'd tell ye. While I was reading this earlier today, my mum asked me what it was. I said it was Ben interpreting his poem for us. Well, I say poem generally in a slurred fashion, so it comes out "pome." She thought I said "palm". So, Ben was interpreting his palm! For a second, there was a massive misunderstanding indeed! :P LOL!
--Dalu--
LOL! Ben's a palm reader!
DeleteLOL! XD I love the way you two played out that introduction! Totally made me laugh! :D
ReplyDeleteCoyle,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the insight. It makes more sense now. Keep up the poetry!
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